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welcome back Mr. Braginski
erm, guess what, i've given up on the idea of the postcard set for cosfest. I would rather just try to do more decent looking prints and do what i can! Really hope to at least get UK US and Russia done (the big three---- *Cough*) Will also do more touch up on this and the canada print later orz thanks for viewing! inspired by a doujin i read (Taiwanese) which features the opium war * u *. I do like to draw more of that era but its not very flattering for nini Y_Y. i'm gong to stick my head out and request for critique, i do want to know how i can improve on my colour coordination orz as well as lighting and all the endless things i feel so frustrated about working on this. thanks! medium- pencils, paintool SAI and Photoshop CS Hetalia belongs to Himaruya China belongs to.. erm well i dunno : D you know i wanna say "rxxx" but erm i cant so AHAHA <strike>not yet</strike> First edit 8th Jul 2009 11:34pm Singapore time: Editted the face slightly, tiny bit of the BG, added more contrast to the lightings and outlines to vague areas. It turns out to be quite hard to edit cause i forgot to save the layered file and its textured!!!! critique still welcome but more likely to be K.I.V for the following artworks (after cons though Yu Y QC is less now while i am desperately rushing and stuff) THANKS FOR THE COMMENTS again! it really helps ^^ I might try to edit again later if time permits but i feel doom already... doom (already given up on some plans so i wont be selling stuff thats too crappy ;u ; Comments I looove the composition and the colours! Great lighting too!
-- ||+i want to be the one to walk in the sun+||   ohhhhh *u* this is hot <3
 I taap his aasssssasssasasssss.
I'm loving the jade beads you gave him C: The coloring is sweet too <3 -- Read my webcomic Shadow Sprinters   I just love his expression,
and the way you coloured it, very good work <3  Opium war!
Recently One of the reasons I liked the pairing UK/China is Opium war  I am very curious about Taiwanese doujin,may I ask about it? -- I have a pool English~ But I will efforts to try it ((((；ﾟДﾟ )) y.. yes but i dont remember the title!! orz perhaps u can ask on the com XD it starts with young russia and ancient china!
 I..I started panting when I saw the preview, and it isn't getting any better.... pantpant...
o//////////A//////////////o -- "You are so gorgeous!" I KNOW THIS DOUJINSHI, I HAVE THEM LINKED HOLD ON.
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Now, for the most part, your porportions look fine. There's not much to nit-pick at there, but there are some things that are really bothering me. First is his head. With the angle we're seeing, the amount of face that's showing, we would see less of the side of the head, if that makes any sense. It makes the head seem too wide.
Also, where the wrist meets the hand, it looks like it bends unnaturally, down then up. It's not too noticable, but little details really bother me...
Ah, next, his hair is all one shade except for where the smoke goes over it, with a couple strands that catch the light. I think that you should add some more shading, maybe some darker and lighter tones to it.
Some of the folds on his clothes... you should make them seem to fall naturally. Maybe even set some cloth down to look at how the folds go. Right now, it looks like his clothes could really use a good ironing.
And I think that's all I'm going to pick at. Beyond those little problems, the piece turned out great, it really did. I faved it almost instantly.
the way you depict smoke from the pipe is very good, i like the wispy feel it exudes.
to pick on the image though, i have a few points to share:
- the shape of his face is off. three quarter direction of the face is one of the most difficult angle. his chin is too slanted toward his left. try drawing a line following his nose through the middle of his mouth and down, you'll know that it is off
-the shadows of window frame on his body is unrealistic. light source is predominantly on his left from the window behind the curtain. therefore his right side should be much darker and you won't really see the cast shadows there, especially on the right side of his coat, it is too bright there. and i see no hint of another light source.
-the flow of his costumes are fairly convincing. but you probably could add some details or pattern to make it more interesting. or you could pay more attention to the folds. you should use a good photo reference to make more realistic looking shadows.
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